Well done to Caitlin, Maia and Emi - (and any others who commented on our Melbourne Quadblogging class last week) Table points await you on your return to class in one weeks time.
We have had some issues being able to comment on the blog - http://tamarpupil.blog.com/ this week. If you can post any comments - great. If not, please leave your comment in the comments section below this post and I will forward onto their teacher via email. Please make sure you add the title and author of the post you are commenting on. An example is below.
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ReplyDeleteWhen you get to posting the comment, it says you need to sign in using 'Mozilla Persona'. And you have to type in your email and create a new password? What do you do..?
Thanks for the comment Maia - Please see the revised post above
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Great poem Harrison. You have used some very specific adjectives. It made the poem create a vivid picture in my mind while i read it. One question - What are Penny Wors?
Keep up the great work!
Mr Theobald
Sacred Heart Petone
NZ
Comment for Mairne:
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Cool poem! You have a very vivid imagination. I felt as though I was really there, when you wrote about how the brambles curl over the branches. What did you mean when you wrote 'Around the alien Japanese Rhubarb'? Did that perhaps mean that the Japanese Rhubarb is rare? You have obviously done alot of research on some plants and placed them in your Secret Garden. Well done!
Maia,
Sacred Heart Petone,
NZ.
Comment for Alice:
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Hi Alice,
Cool poem. I like how it rhymes.
Try this website for some more words that rhyme with 'moo' and 'zoo'.
http://www.rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=Zoo&typeofrhyme=perfect&org1=syl&org2=l&org3=y
From Maia, Sacred Heart School Ptone, NZ
Awesome writing, Sadie.
ReplyDeleteI like how you began with 'Cherry sweet trees tickle up my nose, Goose grass sticks to my jumper' because most people can relate to that. Especially our school, because we wear jumpers and almost anything can stick to them!
'Acorns crumble down the path' is a good line, because when you walk, sticks, acorns etc. tend to snap or get crushed. Is that a sign that someone or something has been in the woods? Maybe you crushed them as you walked by?
Cool poem!
Maia,
Sacred Heart School Petone NZ.
Hi Alice, Daisy and Hollie.
ReplyDeleteCool poem! My favorite line is 'Ferns curl in fear of the cold', because ferns curl when they are dry. They curl in such a way, because the plant can rehydrate faster when rain finally comes, as the fern can absorb more water on the underside of the leaves. Because your story is based in Winter, maybe the fern is absorbing or awaiting water, as it rains more in Winter..
'Defeated by summer in months to come' is a good way to finish, because it talks about the future. The rest of the story is written in 'present tense', as though you are walking through the 'Secret Garden' as you speak, so it is a nice way to finish.
I really like your poem, so well done!
Maia, Sacred Heart Petone, NZ
I hope that is enough comments..?
ReplyDeleteSecret Garden Poem By Alice,Daisy and Hollie.
ReplyDeleteHi I'm Caitlin from Sacred Heart Petone New Zealand.
Well done I thought that was very interesting and informative.
Where did you find all these good words and rhymes?
Caitlin.